Saturday, July 3, 2010

G(Listen)

Glisten -- morning sun
Lights the soft blooms and
Twinkles in the pines.

Listen - is that a 
Mourning Dove's sad, soft cooing --
Pining for love lost?



Brave Miss Yves translates...
luis-lueur de l'aube
Eclairant les fleurs
brillant dans les pins

Ouïs:est-ce le
Chant de deuil d'une colombe
Pleurant son amour ?
 
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18 comments:

Martin said...

Beautiful! And I love the "Twinkles in the pines."

joanna said...

You live in a beautiful world in heart, mind, and soul.

Happy 4th

Joanny

Miss_Yves said...

(G)listen:
I 'm dazzled!

Wonderful twin poems playing on words and sounds!
But...how to translate such plays on words ?????????

Miss_Yves said...

Luis-Soleil matinal(5)
Eclairant les fleurs (5)
Brillant dans les pins (5)

Ouïs:est-ce le (5)
Chant de deuil d'une colombe (7)
Pleurant son amour ? (5)

Miss_Yves said...

Sorry:

Luis-Soleil matinal=6

Miss_Yves said...

Luis-lueur de l'aube (5)

Miss_Yves said...

if you pronouce
Ou/ïs
= 5

Miss_Yves said...

luis-lueur de l'aube
Eclairant les fleurs
brillant dans les pins

Ouïs:est-ce le
Chant de deuil d'une colombe
Pleurant son amour ?

Unknown said...

This was beautiful. The pictures were all great. Nice shots.

Pat in east TN said...

G(Listen) .. aaaaah!

Brian Miller said...

i agree...a beautiful place you got there...stopping to listen...this morning there are quite a few brids serenading me out on the back porch...

Jean Baardsen said...

Especially love the Mourning Dove - great shot!

Elora said...

Beautiful, Vicki! Our Crepe Myrtles are not yet in bloom. I always look forward to their showy presence! I love the shimmering beauty you've captured!

Elora

Deanna said...

Lovely!

Vicki Lane said...

Thanks, folks -- I just loved the way the light did in those first two pics and the word'glisten' kept running through my head.

"Such a lovely word; now what shall I do with it?"

And then I saw the 'listen' embedded in it.

And even as I put the poem together, playing with the repetition of the words/homonyms, I thought, "Oh dear, how WILL Miss Yves deal with this?"

But I see she has. I shall have to get my French/English dictionary in order to appreciate what she's done.

Thank you so much, Miss Yves! I do enjoy our game.

Shimmering -- that's another great word!

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Merisi said...

Beautiful images and words!
I love the French translations, merci to your partner in rhyme! :-)

I tried to capture the morning light at the farmers market today.

Tipper said...

Nothing like listening to nature : )